秋 之 韵
文/姚会昌(吉林松原)
秋山秋水秋天爽
秋风秋雨秋夜凉
秋夜秋凉秋凝霜
秋诗秋词秋乐章
秋鸿秋雁秋飞南
秋思秋念秋愁肠
秋枝秋叶秋草黄
秋菊秋花秋思网
秋蝉秋鸣秋衰亡
秋分秋收秋满仓
秋年秋岁秋沧桑
秋星秋月秋思量
秋韵秋味秋饱尝
秋红秋枫秋盛装
秋时秋光秋美景
秋果秋粮秋茶香
秋淡秋雅秋情宕
秋缥秋缈秋飘翔
秋夕秋照秋重阳
秋祈秋愿秋吉祥
秋安秋健秋无恙
秋来秋去秋岁长
夏去秋来祝安康
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点评语作者/柴永红
《秋之韵》这首诗,如同一幅用文字编织而成的绚丽秋景图,全方位地展现了秋天的多彩风姿与深沉韵味,诗人姚会昌以其细腻且深情的笔触,引领读者走进了一个充满诗意与温情的秋日世界。
开篇“秋山秋水秋天爽,秋风秋雨秋夜凉”,通过简洁而富有节奏感的表述,瞬间勾勒出秋天的整体氛围。秋山与秋水相互映衬,展现出大自然的宁静与辽阔;秋风秋雨带来的凉意,更是让人体会到秋的气息,为全诗奠定了清新凉爽的基调。
“秋夜秋凉秋凝霜,秋诗秋词秋乐章”,将秋夜的清冷与文学艺术相结合,霜的凝结增添了秋的凝重,而秋诗秋词秋乐章则赋予了秋天浓厚的文化底蕴和艺术气息,仿佛秋天本身就是一首优美的乐章,引人沉醉。
“秋鸿秋雁秋飞南,秋思秋念秋愁肠”,借秋鸿秋雁南飞的景象,引发了诗人内心深处的秋思秋念,那愁肠百结的情感,真挚而动人,让人不禁对远方的思念产生共鸣。
“秋枝秋叶秋草黄,秋菊秋花秋思网”,描绘了秋天草木凋零的景象,然而秋菊秋花的绽放又为这萧瑟增添了几分生机与色彩,秋思之网更是巧妙地将无形的思绪具象化,展现了秋天思绪的纷繁复杂。
“秋蝉秋鸣秋衰亡,秋分秋收秋满仓”,秋蝉的衰亡与丰收的景象形成鲜明对比,既有生命流逝的感慨,又有收获的喜悦,体现了秋天的双重性,让人感受到大自然的轮回与生命的无常。
“秋年秋岁秋沧桑,秋星秋月秋思量”,岁月的沧桑在秋天的映衬下显得更加深沉,秋星秋月引发的思量,充满了对人生的思考和对时光的感慨,使诗歌的意境得到了进一步的升华。
“秋韵秋味秋饱尝,秋红秋枫秋盛装”,强调了对秋天韵味的充分体验,秋红秋枫的盛装描绘,展现出秋天的热烈与绚烂,让人仿佛置身于五彩斑斓的秋景之中。
“秋时秋光秋美景,秋果秋粮秋茶香”,优美地描绘了秋天的时光、景色以及丰收的果实和粮食,秋茶香则增添了一份生活的温馨与惬意,让人感受到秋天的富足与美好。
“秋淡秋雅秋情宕,秋缥秋缈秋飘翔”,用富有诗意的词汇形容秋天的淡雅、缥缈和灵动,展现出秋天如梦如幻的特质,让人心生向往。
“秋夕秋照秋重阳,秋祈秋愿秋吉祥”,将秋天的特定时刻与人们的美好祈愿相结合,体现了对生活的热爱和对未来的期待,充满了积极向上的情感。
“秋安秋健秋无恙,秋来秋去秋岁长,夏去秋来祝安康”,以祝福结尾,表达了对平安健康的渴望,以及对岁月流转的坦然,最后的祝福更是温暖人心。
整首诗结构严谨,层次分明,通过不断重复“秋”字,强化了主题,增强了诗歌的节奏感和韵律美。诗人运用丰富多样的意象,从自然景观到人文情感,从生命的兴衰到生活的美好,全面而深入地展现了秋天的韵味。语言优美流畅,情感真挚深沉,既让我们领略到了秋天的外在之美,又能感受到诗人内心对秋天的独特感悟和思考。
当今快节奏的生活中,这首诗宛如一阵清风,让人在繁忙中停下脚步,静下心来品味秋天的宁静与美好,思考人生的意义与价值。它不仅是对秋天的赞美,更是对生活的热爱和对未来的憧憬,具有很强的感染力和启示意义。
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柴永红,笔名红鑫,祖籍江苏省南京市,中国当代著名作家,创作成就:出版诗著有36万字的柴永红诗集*雨潇潇红鑫鑫*、*云中紫城静楼乾坤*和*铁马冰河*三部。荣获2017*中国新诗百年*全球华语诗人诗作评选一百位网络最给力诗人奖,排行榜第二名,荣获*建国70周年中华好诗榜、2019年度中国诗歌排行榜、中外华语诗坛精英百强榜*诗人奖,荣获2021中国金榜电影人春晚名人名家榜,金奖。被翻译诗歌入选《苏菲译.世界诗歌年鉴2022卷》(汉英对照)。《苏菲译*世界诗歌年鉴2022卷》 (英汉双语纸质版和电子版)苏菲翻译、主编,全球出版发行,世界16国联合出版发行!纸质书13国: 中国、美国、英国、德国、法国、西班牙、意大利、荷兰、波兰、瑞典、日本、加拿大、澳大利亚。电子书 13国: 美国、英国、德国、法国、西班牙、意大利、荷兰、日本、巴西、加拿大、墨西哥、澳大利亚、印度。金榜头条编辑总部副社长,金榜头条新媒体平台总理事长、文学艺术顾问,金榜头条形象大使、总编,中国新时代诗人档案库会员,兰州市作家协会会员,一枝红莲文学社创始人、社长、总编、总裁董事长,金榜头条新媒体平台签约作家诗人!现居北京市朝阳区金茂府!
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Chai Yonghong, pen name Hongxin, whose ancestral home is Nanjing, Jiangsu Province, is a famous contemporary Chinese writer. His creative achievements include the publication of three poetry collections totaling 360,000 words: "Rainy and Whistling, Hongxinxin", "Purple City in the Clouds, Silent Building and Cosmic Changes", and "Iron Horses and Frozen Rivers". He won the award of the second place on the list of the 100 most powerful poets on the Internet in the selection of global Chinese poets' poems in 2017 for the 100th anniversary of New Chinese Poetry. He also won the poet award in the "Good Poems List of China for the 70th Anniversary of the Founding of the People's Republic of China, Chinese Poetry Ranking List in 2019, and the Elite Hundred List of Chinese and Foreign Chinese Poetry Circles". He was awarded the gold medal in the list of celebrities and masters of the 2021 Chinese Golden List Film People's Spring Festival Gala. His translated poems were selected for "Sophie's Translation. World Poetry Yearbook 2022 Volume" (Chinese-English contrast). "Sophie's Translation. World Poetry Yearbook 2022 Volume" (paper and electronic versions in both Chinese and English) was translated and edited by Sophie, published globally, and jointly published in 16 countries around the world! The 13 countries for the paper version are: China, the United States, the United Kingdom, Germany, France, Spain, Italy, the Netherlands, Poland, Sweden, Japan, Canada, and Australia. The 13 countries for the electronic version are: the United States, the United Kingdom, Germany, France, Spain, Italy, Japan, Brazil, Canada, Mexico, Australia, and India. He is the vice president of the headquarters of the Golden List Headlines Editing Department, the general director and literary and artistic consultant of the new media platform of the Golden List Headlines, the image ambassador and chief editor of the Golden List Headlines, a member of the Chinese New Era Poets' Archive, a member of the Lanzhou Writers' Association, the founder, president, chief editor, and CEO of the "One Red Lotus Literature Society", and a contracted writer and poet of the new media platform of the Golden List Headlines! Currently, he lives in Jinmao Mansion, Chaoyang District, Beijing!