张先体

一：冬至

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文/傅怀东  苏州

霜青雪白彩霞红。沥田禾，冽宇空。 

练丘冰岭凛红枫。冰清耳，冻精瞳。

狐皮貂袄锦毛绒。数凉九，过寒冬。

聚友围炉杯盏满，馐净碟，酒清盅。

二：冬至

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临冬冷至秀青霜。浣轻纱，换厚妆。 

拉帘防雾护寒窗。扶摇躲，薄衣藏。

飞沙牵石北风扬。结湖水，冻长江。

朔气凝川寒曲奏，经腊月，等梅香。

三：冬至

三部韵

星稀日缓雪来迟。饰绒妆，缠厚衣。 

强身康体舞轻姿。江南秀，水乡迷。

烹馐尝膳品新饴。素霜躲，逆风离。

朔气凝川寒曲奏，栖暮夕，起晨曦。

四：冬至

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严冬冷雾冻荷枯。水乡描，古市图。 

锦霜晶露绣姑苏。冰丘岭，凛溪渠。

迎朝窥景踏新途。路行稳，步轻徒。

赴岭防坡行慢道，污垢铲，劣尘除。

五：冬至

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傅怀东  苏州

丘寒岭冷冽山崖。镀银霜，净雾霾。 

晚禾迟获黍冬栽。芙蓉卸，腊梅开。

观亭窥阁入楼台。阅新景，品鲜斋。

曲奏评弹闻软语，敲雅韵，释胸怀。

六  ：雪

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描山镀岱绘丘银。铲污埃，净劣尘。 

压松侵柏秀山榛。清街道，刷湖滨。

摧梅滋蕊绣芳芬。洗都市，靓乡村。

解水滋田肥沃野，融九九，等新春。

七：雾

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描氤绘幻影封山。隐阴霾，造险湾。 

阻朝封日若云盘。封车道，惑丘峦。

瞻花遮影挡光环。影藏幻，貌如烟。

挠宇临穹藏亮月，迷祭祀，误仙坛

八：霜

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迎晨积露镀晴朝。黍茎伤，柳叶凋。 

虏藤青绿变红椒。伤花蕊，损禾苗。

侵菘俘韭略茼蒿。凛英萼，冽枝梢。

罚鹤伤鹑惩白鹭，摧返雁，犯莺巢。

九：雨

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滋菘养黍壮塘荷。润冬梅，沃夏菠。 

净尘除垢刷窗玻。淋花蕊，湿青禾。

涟鱼漪蟹养田螺。育松柏，蔓藤萝。

润宇天河翔喜鹊，游缱鹤，旅天鹅。

            作者简介:

傅怀东，笔名:东韵心语。原籍:江苏连云港市灌云人，现居苏州。无职自由人 诗词爱好者，《诗词天地》会员，《青年文学家》理事会理事。多家网刊签约作家，诗人。喜爱写诗，词，随笔短文。诗词以写景抒情为主。存诗词二千余首，曾在纸刊:《苏州文学》《西北文艺 a》《小雪》《青年文学家》等多家刊物刊登。以及多家文学社和网站平台发表了很多作品，每天都有新的作品登上各平台网站。

Intoxicated Rouge

Nine Ci-Poems in the Style of Zhang Xian

I. Winter Solstice

(Tune to Rhyme Series 1)

By Fu Huaidong (Suzhou)

Frost turns blue, snow shines white, rosy clouds spread far and wide;

The fields lie bare, the cold sky stretches endless overhead.

Ice-cloaked hills and ridges frame the crimson maples’ pride;

Clear frosty air nips ears, and freezing wind stings eyes instead.

Fox-fur coats and sable jackets, soft brocade linings warm;

We count the cold nine-night cycles, through winter’s chill to sail.

Gathering friends around the stove, cups and bowls brim with charm;

Dishes are spotless, goblets filled with pure wine, good and pale.

II. Winter Solstice

(Tune to Rhyme Series 2)

Cold creeps in as winter comes, fresh frost gilds the scene;

We put away thin silk robes, and don thick warm attire.

Draw curtains tight to keep mist out, shield the cold window screen;

Hide from the whistling wind, and stash light clothes away with care.

Flying sand stirs up stones, north wind howls and sweeps around;

Lake waters freeze solid, the great Yangtze locks in ice.

Chill air congeals the rivers, a cold tune starts to sound;

We pass the twelfth lunar month, waiting for plum blossoms’ spice.

III. Winter Solstice

(Tune to Rhyme Series 3)

Stars are sparse, the sun creeps slow, snow lingers on its way;

We dress in fluffy gowns, wrap thick coats around our frame.

Exercise to keep fit and strong, dance with gentle sway;

Jiangnan’s grace unfolds, and water towns cast a charming flame.

Cook delicacies, taste fine meals, savor sweet new treats;

Avoid the plain frost, stay away from the biting headwind.

Chill air freezes the rivers, a cold melody repeats;

We rest at dusk’s soft glow, and rise with dawn’s first light to mend.

IV. Winter Solstice

(Tune to Rhyme Series 4)

Severe winter’s cold mist freezes lotus, making them fade and die;

Water towns paint a picture, old markets sketch a tranquil view.

Colorful frost and crystal dew embroider Suzhou’s sky;

Ice-capped hills and ridges line the cold streams clear and blue.

Greet the morning, peek at scenery, step on a brand-new path;

Walk steadily on the road, take light steps as we roam.

Climb hills, watch for slopes, take slow paths without any wrath;

Scoop up dirt and filth, sweep away all the dust and foam.

V. Winter Solstice

(Tune to Rhyme Series 5)

By Fu Huaidong (Suzhou)

Hills and ridges shiver cold, fierce wind bites the steep cliff’s face;

Silver frost coats the peaks, clearing away mist and haze.

Late crops are harvested slowly, grains sown in winter’s space;

Hibiscus fades and falls, wintersweet begins to blaze.

Admire pavilions, peek at towers, step into the lofty hall;

View new sceneries, taste fresh dishes in the quiet study.

Listen to the soft tunes of Pingtan, the elegant rhymes enthrall;

Tap out refined verses, and let our hearts and minds run free.

VI. Snow

(Tune to Rhyme Series 6)

Paint mountains and ridges, dye hills silver-white all around;

Scoop up dirt and dust, sweep away all the filth and grime.

Press down pines and cypresses, adorn the mountain shrubs’ ground;

Clean the streets and roads, brush the lakeside’s peaceful clime.

Break plum branches, nourish flower buds, embroider fragrant scent;

Wash the bustling city, brighten the quiet countryside.

Melt into water to moisten fields, make the wild land content;

Thaw through the nine cold cycles, waiting for spring’s warm tide.

VII. Mist

(Tune to Rhyme Series 7)

Weave mist and haze, paint illusions, seal the mountains from sight;

Hide the dark mist and fog, create perilous bends and lanes.

Block the morning sun, curl like a cloud disc in the sky bright;

Close the vehicle roads, confuse the hills and ridges’ plains.

Gaze at flowers, their shadows hidden, blocked from the glowing light;

Shapes lurk in fantasy, appearances fade like smoke thin.

Hover over the sky, hide the bright moon from our eager sight;

Confuse the sacrificial rites, delay the fairy altar’s din.

VIII. Frost

(Tune to Rhyme Series 8)

Greet the morning, gather dew, gild the clear and bright dawn hour;

Millet stems get damaged, willow leaves wither and fall down.

Seize the green vines, turn them into red peppers in its power;

Harm flower stamens and pistils, damage seedlings in the town.

Invade cabbages and chives, slightly hurt the crown daisies too;

Chill the delicate flower calyxes, nip the twigs and shoots.

Punish cranes and quails, penalize the white egrets as they flew;

Break the wild geese’s return journey, invade the orioles’ cute roosts.

IX. Rain

(Tune to Rhyme Series 9)

Moisten cabbages and grains, make pond lotuses grow strong and tall;

Nourish wintersweet in cold, enrich summer spinach’s green.

Wash away dust and dirt, scrub the windowpanes smooth and all;

Sprinkle flower stamens and pistils, wet the green crops’ sheen.

Ripples lull fish and crabs, nurture river snails in the deep;

Foster pines and cypresses, let creepers and ivy spread and leap.

Moisten the sky and the Milky Way, magpies soar and sweep;

Crane pairs wander leisurely, swans travel and take a peep.

About the Author

Fu Huaidong, pen name Dongyun Xinyu, was originally from Guanyun, Lianyungang, Jiangsu Province, and now resides in Suzhou. He is a freelance poet and a lover of poetry, a member of Poetry and Prose World, and a director of the Council of Young Writers. He has signed contracts with many online literary journals as a writer and poet. He is fond of composing poems, ci-poems, essays and short articles, with his works mainly focusing on depicting scenery and expressing emotions. He has created more than 2,000 poems and ci-poems, which have been published in many print journals such as Suzhou Literature, Northwest Literature and Art A, Light Snow and Young Writers, as well as on numerous literary societies’ and websites’ platforms. New works of his are featured on various online platforms every day.

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九阕红妆吟冬韵 一笔江天写浩茫——评傅怀东《醉红妆》组词九首

         点评词作者/柴永红

乾坤浩荡，四时迭代，凛冬之境，历来为文人墨客铺陈胸臆之卷。霜雪封疆、雾雨锁川，有人叹寒天寥廓，有人绘冰魂玉魄，而傅怀东以九阕《醉红妆》张先体组词，依一至九部韵次第挥毫，于江南冬景里凿冰取火，姑苏烟雨中裁霞作笺，将寒天风物之雄奇、水乡人文之雅致熔于一炉，谱就一曲纵横天地、贯通古今的冬韵长歌。这组词，是以韵为锋，以景为纸，以心为墨，写尽了冬的凛冽与温柔，寒的苍莽与生机，更在平仄之间，撑起了一片属于江南的、亦刚亦柔的浩荡天地。

傅怀东这九首《醉红妆》，最令人拍案的，是其以小见大的格局铺陈。组词以冬至起笔，五阕冬至词如五面明镜，映照出江南冬景的不同侧面，而后又以雪、雾、霜、雨四景续之，从节令到物象，从宏观到微观，层层递进，步步拓疆。首阕冬至“霜青雪白彩霞红。沥田禾，冽宇空”，起笔便有横扫千军之势，霜雪与彩霞同框，寒野与长天共色，寥寥数字，便勾勒出天地玄黄、寒彻云霄的冬景底色；“聚友围炉杯盏满，馐净碟，酒清盅”，又陡然从天地的壮阔收束到人间的温暖，于凛冬之中写尽烟火气，刚柔相济，意境顿生。第二阕冬至“飞沙牵石北风扬。结湖水，冻长江”，笔锋一转，写尽北风之雄、冰河之壮，将江南的温婉暂时收起，取而代之的是塞北般的雄浑与凛冽；“经腊月，等梅香”，却又在凛冽之中埋下一丝春意，于绝望处见希望，于苍茫处见生机。第三阕冬至“星稀日缓雪来迟。饰绒妆，缠厚衣”，以细腻之笔写人在冬景中的状态，“江南秀，水乡迷”，又将视角拉回江南的灵秀，与前阕的雄浑形成鲜明对比；第四阕“锦霜晶露绣姑苏。冰丘岭，凛溪渠”，以“绣”字点睛，将霜露比作针线，把姑苏城绣成一幅冰清玉洁的画卷，奇思妙想，令人叹服；第五阕“丘寒岭冷冽山崖。镀银霜，净雾霾”，写寒山之峻、霜雾之净，“曲奏评弹闻软语，敲雅韵，释胸怀”，则将江南的文化底蕴融入词中，冬景不仅有颜值，更有风骨。

如果说五阕冬至词是为冬景立骨，那么雪、雾、霜、雨四阕便是为冬景添肉，四首咏物词各有侧重，各具神韵，共同构筑起一个立体、多元的冬日世界。写雪“描山镀岱绘丘银。铲污埃，净劣尘”，一个“描”字，一个“绘”字，将雪比作丹青妙手，把山川大地染成一片银白，而“铲污埃，净劣尘”则赋予雪以高洁的品格，不仅是美景，更是涤荡世间污浊的使者；“融九九，等新春”，又写出雪的无私，以自身的消融，孕育着来年的生机，这份胸襟，何其豪迈。写雾“描氤绘幻影封山。隐阴霾，造险湾”，雾的神秘、诡谲被刻画得入木三分，“影藏幻，貌如烟”，写出雾的缥缈、虚幻，仿佛将人带入一个仙境；“迷祭祀，误仙坛”，则增添了一丝神话色彩，雾的形象更加丰满。写霜“迎晨积露镀晴朝。黍茎伤，柳叶凋”，霜的凌厉、肃杀跃然纸上，“虏藤青绿变红椒”，一个“虏”字，将霜拟人化，仿佛是一位铁面无私的将军，将世间的绿意收归麾下；“摧返雁，犯莺巢”，更是写出霜的霸道，连候鸟和莺雀都难逃其手，这份凛冽，何其刚猛。写雨“滋菘养黍壮塘荷。润冬梅，沃夏菠”，雨的温润、滋养与前三者形成鲜明对比，没有雪的高洁，没有雾的神秘，没有霜的凌厉，却有润物无声的力量；“润宇天河翔喜鹊，游缱鹤，旅天鹅”，雨后的天空澄澈明净，喜鹊翱翔，鹤鹅游弋，一派生机勃勃的景象，为整组词画上了一个充满希望的句号。

除了格局宏大、意境深远，这组词的艺术手法更是精妙绝伦。其一，是白描手法的炉火纯青。傅怀东的词，没有华丽的辞藻堆砌，没有晦涩的典故铺陈，而是以最简洁的语言，勾勒出最生动的画面。“霜青雪白彩霞红”“飞沙牵石北风扬”“描山镀岱绘丘银”，这些句子，如同一幅幅水墨画，寥寥数笔，便意境全出，让人如临其境。其二，是拟人手法的巧妙运用。写霜“虏藤青绿变红椒”“罚鹤伤鹑惩白鹭”，写雪“摧梅滋蕊绣芳芬”，写雾“隐阴霾，造险湾”，将自然物象拟人化，赋予它们人的情感和动作，原本冰冷的冬景变得鲜活起来，充满了生命力。其三，是动静结合的相得益彰。组词中，既有“冽宇空”“结湖水，冻长江”的静态描写，也有“飞沙牵石北风扬”“强身康体舞轻姿”的动态刻画，静态描写勾勒出冬景的苍茫与静谧，动态刻画则增添了冬景的活力与生机，动静结合，整组词的意境更加丰富。其四，是情景交融的浑然天成。傅怀东的词，景中有情，情中有景，景与情相互交融，不可分割。“聚友围炉杯盏满，馐净碟，酒清盅”，在冬景的凛冽中，写出了人间的温暖；“曲奏评弹闻软语，敲雅韵，释胸怀”，冬景的苍茫中，写出了文人的雅致；“融九九，等新春”，在冬景的萧瑟中，写出了对未来的希望。这份情，不是刻意的煽情，而是从景中自然流露出来的，含蓄而深沉，令人回味无穷。

更难能可贵的是，这组词严守格律，又不拘泥于格律。张先体的《醉红妆》，有其固定的句式和韵律要求，傅怀东的九首组词，不仅严守平仄，而且依一至九部韵次第创作，这种创作方式，本身就需要极高的诗词功底。但傅怀东并没有被格律束缚住手脚，而是在格律的框架内，自由驰骋，挥洒自如。他的词，语言质朴清丽，却又不失豪迈大气；意境深远悠长，却又不失通俗易懂。无论是文人雅士，还是普通读者，都能从中感受到冬景的美，感受到诗词的魅力。

傅怀东作为一名常年栖居苏州的诗人，其词作中深深烙印着江南的文化底蕴。姑苏的水乡、亭台、评弹，都成为他词中的意象。“锦霜晶露绣姑苏”“观亭窥阁入楼台”“曲奏评弹闻软语”，这些句子，不仅写出了江南的景，更写出了江南的韵，整组词充满了浓郁的江南气息。而这份江南气息，又与组词的豪迈大气融为一体，形成了一种独特的风格——豪迈中的温婉，温婉中的豪迈。这种风格，既有北方诗词的雄浑壮阔，又有南方诗词的婉约清丽，刚柔相济，别具一格。

纵观这九首《醉红妆》组词，不是一首简单的咏冬词，而是一部浓缩的冬日史诗。以九阕词为九章，以一至九部韵为九节，写尽了冬的景，冬的情，冬的魂。以豪迈大气的笔调，勾勒出天地的壮阔；以细腻温婉的笔触，描绘出人间的温暖；以充满希望的结尾，预示着春天的到来。傅怀东的笔下，冬不再是萧瑟、寂寥的代名词，而是充满了生机、充满了希望的季节。是对自然的礼赞，是对生命的讴歌，更是对生活的热爱。

当下这个快节奏的时代，傅怀东能够沉下心来，创作这样一组格律严谨、意境深远的组词，实属难得。这组词，不仅让我们感受到了诗词的魅力，更让我们感受到了传统文化的博大精深。如同一股清流，流淌在诗词的长河中，滋润着我们的心灵；如同一盏明灯，照亮着我们的精神世界，我们在喧嚣的尘世中，寻得一份宁静，寻得一份诗意。

九阕红妆，九种风情，九部韵脚，九片天地。傅怀东以笔为剑，以韵为锋，冬景的画卷上，刻下了属于自己的印记。这组词，当得起“豪迈大气，意境深远”八个字，更当得起每一位诗词爱好者的细细品读。