一部有信仰追求的诗意小说

---评董元静小说《迷踪鹿回头》

作者｜黎正光（中国）

英译｜董业勤（法国）

   认真读完带有悬疑奇幻色彩小说《迷踪鹿回头》，我不禁陷入了沉思。我曾在报社当文学编辑，从那时认识常投稿的元静女士，已整整过去四十年了。由于我过去曾写过一段时间散文诗，故同擅写散文诗的元静女士一直保持着文友间的联系。这些年来，她一直笔耕不缀，涉及的文学领域也取得了令人傲娇成绩。可以说，她的一生真与文学结下不解之缘。

   读完小说，其中的香眉、琳姐、纬弟、萨先生、祖母绿项链、灵灵、吉他手、机器人米粒3、猎人等，都给我留下了较深印象。显然，这是一部具有隐喻和象征意义的悬疑小说，作者把她的抒写愿景注入到所有创作的人物与故事当中。全书虽充满了悬疑与奇幻，但令人振奋的是，针对阴谋与欺骗，那拯救的力量却是那样强悍与执着！面对不幸的受难者香眉，受同情心驱使的悲悯情怀，又是如此令人动容和礼赞。

   统观整部小说，我认为全书呈现出作者三大追求：

如何破除施加在香眉和小鹿颈上那具有象征意义的祖母绿魔咒项链，如何拯救香眉和小鹿这两个善良的弱者，无论是琳姐、纬弟，还是吉他手与机器人米粒3和灵灵，他们都投入到各种不同拯救行动中。正如琳琳说的那样，“你的拯救不在受造界，而在永恒之灵那里！你不能背叛你生命的主人！”为什么要拯救被恶人萨先生施害又具有遗传基因魔咒的香眉？这香眉不就是芸芸众生的缩影么？不就是受苦的迷途者吗？而在整个拯救过程中，那琳琳、纬弟、母亲和队长、吉他手、灵灵、猎人和机器人米粒3，不都获得人间共同的价值观和珍贵的人间大爱吗？甚至，为了友谊和大爱，纬弟不惜付出了他年轻的生命。而作为这拯救力量的形象体现，舍己忘我的精神又在神话人物猎人身上得到展示和升华，为救香眉脱离死难，他的主动牺牲将小说带入了高潮。

二、整部小说呈现出作者对诗意化写作追求。

元静女士曾喜欢过诗歌，也写出不少蕴含诗意的散文诗。我们从小说字里行间，均能感受到她行文中对作品诗意化的追求。如第三章中“阳光下，一排排白桦亭亭玉立，笔直地插入蓝天，好像一篇篇史诗展开了洁白的诗笺”，第八章中“风，哗啦啦掀起病房的窗帘，乌云黑压压翻滚着，一朵枯萎的残花坠落下去，沉往幽暗的湖底”。还有第十章中“风向陡转，柳丝帘幕又合拢，重重叠叠，遮蔽了病人，遮蔽了错位的时空”，第十三章中“仿佛一只金色的夜莺，轻盈地滑过灵里的时空，然后汇入天上的合唱”。不仅于此，还有她在第十八章中形容杜鹃时，也展开了诗意化的想象“杜鹃鸟，阵阵悲啼，口吐鲜血，鲜红的血滴落在漫山遍野，化成一朵朵美丽的杜鹃花”。

   当我阅读《迷踪鹿回头》这部小说时，的确，我不仅对小说中人物与故事感兴趣，还能强烈感受到作者在作品中对诗意化的追求。即便作者在描写俗世中的场景，她在第十九章中也这样令人吃惊地写道，“众里寻他千百度，漂泊在一座座城市的夜海，漫游在一场场歌舞的人海；众里寻他千百度，彷徨在激情燃烧的奏鸣里，踟躇在瞬息万变的商场中......。”还有第二十七章中“密林深处，浓绿之中，一缕悠悠的竹笛声飘飞出来，委婉而有力，清亮而深沉”，以及第三十三章中的“一支歌，一支深情的旋律，从星星的笛孔里飞出”，“ 那一片枫叶，那一朵杜鹃，那一枚星辰，那一颗心形的宝石，一直在场，从来就没有旁观袖手......”。通过众多诗意化的句子，我们不难看出，元静用她特有的女姓触觉，去灵敏地感受和抒写出众多令人难以忘记的美丽句子来。

三、该小说呈现出对信仰的虔诚追求。

在整部小说中，作者把对信仰和超然境界的追求，通过人物、情节故事和蕴含作品中的人间大爱隐喻般呈现出来。该小说对象征邪恶、阴谋与欺骗的魔头、萨先生与遗忘药等，对那些真善美的敌对势力，均有爱憎分明的描述与鞭笞。

   且看小说第十三章中所描述的句子，“最后，小鹿定睛在一片星形的枫叶上，它终于看清，满天奇妙的恩光，是从那一个钉穿的星星流淌下来的，遍山血红的丹霞，是从那一个伤痛的创口里开放出来的，仿佛，鲜红的热血涌流而出，随着一道奇异的音流”。还有第十七章中“你的拯救不在受造界，更不在这里，而在创造你的永恒之灵那里！你不能背叛你生命的主人”。“永恒之灵，他是谁？”试想，一个作家若没有对《圣经》的熟知和信仰生活的深刻体验，笔下哪能有“恩光四射的红宝石”这样的动人意象？哪能有“永恒之灵”及“圣爱”的词汇出现？而每当我看到有这样充满特殊寓意的词语时，心里不免充满了不一样的亲切感。

   还有第十八章的“眼前，朵朵鲜花簇拥着一个鲜红的真谛，鲜红的中心如血液，如早晨太阳的微笑。‘快快回转，你们应当悔改’。一声声，一声声，何等急迫，何等恳切，宣告着爱到流血才是圣爱的天音”。还有第十九章中“他只用那支小小竹笛，吹出了一支悠悠的圣歌，”“归来吧！归来哟！归来吧！归来哟！......”试想，若是作者没有神的儿女的情怀和《圣经》的深深濡染，字里行间哪会有“天音”与“圣歌”这样的神圣之词？对真善美的渴望对人间大爱的追求，应该是每个生命最崇高的愿望，但在神的儿女那里，却是他们一生都在践行的行为准则。

   不久，全书寓意的重点就在第二十九章中得到体现，“上天下地，唯有永恒之灵可以救你，因为你的病源自遗传基因的魔咒，这是死扣，受造界无法解开，唯有创造者，他能创造基因，就一定能改写、医治和拯救”。之前，面对迫害与欺凌，香眉一再发出对人世的诘问，我该“到哪里去找我要寻觅的救赎呢？”最后，站在大海高崖之处，近乎绝望的香眉终于发出了她急切的呼救声：“救救我！亲爱的主人，求你大施怜悯，以你天上的大能力，以你创造的大能力，帮助我，医治我，改写我的遗传基因，改写我的DNA密码，求你释放我这死囚牢里的孩子，斩断我家族遗传基因的魔咒锁链！”

   哪是“受造界”？谁是“永恒之灵”？谁是死囚牢中的孩子？谁在遭受“家族遗传基因的魔咒锁链”？这极具象征性比喻和大胆之问，在我看来，正是《迷踪鹿回头》想表现的核心问题，想追求的终极之境。香眉终于醒来，小鹿终于回头，拯救和医治终于完成。作者又在书中借香眉之口，巧妙地给读者做了明确回答：“为我死去的不是猎人吗？其实，就是他？他就是亲爱父，我的主人！”

我认为，《迷踪鹿回头》是一部植根于我们土地上具有独特隐喻性的小说，作者告诉我们人间有善恶，还有通过祖母绿项链遗传下的社会和文化病因，要改变这种具有DNA遗传性质的病根，就得用心去创造，去获取那颗真正的“阳光红宝石”。

当我们读完这部道德感正义感与美感都得到充分呈现的小说，人们就能领会作者一直长期坚持不懈追求的良苦用心了。

 （2023年八月末）

An allegorical novel with the pursuit of faith

---Comment on Dong Yuanjing's Novel "The Lost Deer Returns. "

 By Li Zhengguang(China)

Tr. DONG Yeqin(France)

After carefully reading the suspenseful and allegorical novel "The Lost Deer Returns", I couldn't help but fall into contemplation. I used to work as a literary editor at a newspaper, and it has been forty years since I met Ms. Yuan Jing, who often submits articles. Since I have written prose poetry for a period of time in the past, Ms. Yuan Jing, who is good at writing prose poetry,

we have always maintained the literary friendship. Over the years, she has been diligent in writing and has achieved impressive results in the field of literature. It can be said that her life was truly inseparable from literature.

After reading the novel, the characters Xiangmei, Lin Jie, Wei Di, Mr. Sa, Emerald Necklace, Lingling, Guitarist, Robot Mi Li 3, Hunter, etc. all left a deep impression on me. Obviously, this is a suspense novel with metaphorical and symbolic significance, and the author injects her lyrical vision into all the characters and stories she creates. Although the book is full of suspense and fantasy, what is exciting is that in the face of conspiracy and deception, the power of salvation is so strong and persistent! Faced with the unfortunate victim Xiangmei, the compassion is so touching and admirable.

Looking at the entire novel, I believe it presents the author's three main pursuits:

How to break the symbolic cursed emerald necklace imposed on the necks of Xiangmei and the little deer, and how to save these two kind-hearted weak individuals? Whoever they are Lin Jie, Wei Di, guitarist, robot Mi Li 3, and Lingling, they are all involved in various rescue operations. 

As Linlin said, "Your salvation is not in this secular world, but in the eternal spirit! You cannot betray the master of your life!" Why save Xiangmei, who has a genetic curse and has been harmed by the wicked Mr. Sa? Isn't her the symbol of the weak among all living beings? Isn't her the symbol of a suffering wanderer? And throughout the entire rescue process, didn't Lin Lin, Wei Di, mother and captain, guitarist, Lingling, hunter, and robot Mi Li all gain common human values and precious human love? What’s more, Wei Di sacrificed his young life for the sake of friendship and the great love. The saving power is also showed and sublimated in the mythological character the Hunter. Indeed, to save Xiangmei from the death, his sacrifice brought the novel to a climax.

2、 The entire novel presents the author's pursuit of poetic writing.

Ms. Yuan Jing has loved poetry and has written many poetic prose poems. We can feel her pursuit of poetic expression in her writing between the lines:

When I read the novel 'Lost Deer Returns', I am not only interested in the characters and stories in the novel, but also strongly felt the author's pursuit of poetic expression. Even though the author is describing scenes in the secular world, she surprisingly writes in Chapter 19 that, "Looking for him thousands of times, wandering in the night sea of cities, wandering in the sea of people singing and dancing, searching for him thousands of times, wandering in the burning melody of passion, hesitating in the ever-changing shopping mall... ". In Chapter 27," Deep in the dense forest, amidst the dense green, a wisp of lingering bamboo flute sound floats out, gentle and powerful, clear and deep", And in Chapter 33, "A song, a deep melody, flies out of the flute hole of the stars", "That maple leaf, that rhododendron, that star, that heart-shaped gem, have always been present, and have never stood idly by. "

Through numerous poetic sentences, it is not difficult to see that Yuan Jing uses her unique female touch to sensitively feel and express numerous unforgettable beautiful sentences.

3、 The novel presents a devout pursuit of faith.

Throughout the novel, the author presents herpursuit of faith and transcendental realm through characters, plots and stories, and the human love embedded in the work. The novel describes and criticizes the hostile forces of truth, goodness, and beauty, such as Mr. Sa, the Devil and the amnesia medicine, which symbolize evil, conspiracy, and deception. 

Let's look at the sentence described in Chapter 13, "Finally, the little deer fixed its gaze on a starry maple leaf. It finally saw clearly that the wonderful light in the sky was flowing down from that pierced star, and the blood-red sunset on the mountain was bloomed from that painful wound, as if the bright red blood was gushing out, along with a strange sound. And in Chapter 17, 'Your salvation is not in the realm of creation, let alone here, but with the eternal spirit that created you! You cannot betray the master of your life'. Who is the Eternal Spirit? "Without a writer's familiarity with the Holy Book and profound experience of spiritual life, how could one create such a moving image as" the radiant ruby "? Where can the word 'Eternal Spirit' appear? And whenever I see words with such special meanings, my heart is inevitably filled with a particular sense of familiarity.

There is also Chapter 18, "In front of us, flowers cluster around a bright red truth, with a bright red center like blood, like the smile of the morning sun. 'Quickly turn, you should repent.' With one voicefollowing another voice, how urgent, how sincere, proclaiming that only love until it bleeds is the heavenly voice of divine love. In Chapter 19, "He only used that small bamboo flute to play a leisurely hymn:" Come back! Come back! Come back! Come back! " If the author did not have the feelings of God's children and the deep influence of the Holy Book, how could there be sacred words like" Heavenly Voice "and" Holy Song "between the lines? The desire for truth, goodness, and beauty, and the pursuit of great love in the world, should be the most noble wish of every life, but for God’schildren, it is a code of conduct that they practice throughout their lives.

The key point of the book's meaning was reflected in Chapter 29, "In the heavens, in the earth, only the Eternal Spirit can save you, because your illness stems from the curse of genetic inheritance, which is a dead chain that cannot be unraveled in the realm of creation. Only the creator, who can create genes can rewrite, heal, and save you. " So, facing persecution and bullying, Xiangmei once again questioned the world, "Where should I go to find the redemption?" Standing on a high cliff in the sea, desperate Xiangmei cried for help: "Save me! Dear master, please show great mercy, use your heavenly power, use your creative power, help me, heal me, rewrite my genetic code, rewrite my DNA code, please release me from death row, break the curse chain of my family's genetic code! "

What is the 'created world'? Who is the 'Eternal Spirit'? Who is the child on death row? Who is suffering from the "curse chain of family genetic inheritance"? Those highly symbolic metaphor and bold questions, in my opinion, are the core issuesthat "Lost Deer Returns" aims to convey. Xiangmei finally woke up, the little deer finally returned, and the rescue and treatment were finally completed. In the book, the author cleverly gave the reader a clear answer by borrowing the words of Xiangmei: "Isn't it the hunter who died for me? In fact, it's him? He's my dear father, my master! "

I believe that 'The Lost Deer Returned' is a novel with unique metaphors rooted in our land. The author tells us that there are good and evil in the world, and the social and cultural causes inherited through the emerald necklace. To change this genetic disease with DNA properties, one must use one's heart to create and obtain the true sunshine ruby. When we finish reading this novel, which thoroughly presents a sense of morality, justice, and beauty, we can understand the author's persistent pursuit of good and virtue.

书评者简介：

黎正光，诗人、作家。当过兵上过大学，曾是新闻人并任报社文学编辑。上世纪八十年代中期，他策划并实施了中国文化人第一位徒步考察长江源无人区壮举（几次险些丢命），后《人民日报》副刊误以为他牺牲并误发他诗为“遗作”，在中国文化界引起一片哗然。1999年底，他创办了中国《汉语文学》网站并出任总编辑，当时在中国文学界产生了较大影响。2001年，他策划《中国女子珠峰极限驾车探险》活动，并担任领队圆满完成任务。2006年，他集多年考察成果，开始写作汉字发明人仓颉的长篇历史小说，被誉为中国仓颉创作第一人。

他几十年创作生涯中，在中国各大报刋发表过近千首（篇）诗作，出版过《生命交响诗》、《血羽之翔》、《雪情》、《时间之血》等诗集和多种评论。出版的长篇历史小说《仓颉密码》和藏地长篇小说《牧狼人》现正在喜马拉雅FM热播中。曾多次参与策划创作影视剧和纪录片，诗歌作品曾多次在国内外获奖。现为美国国际文化科学院院士，成都扬雄学会艺术总监，中国自由撰稿人。

英译者简介：

董业勤，四川成都人，80后，毕业于武汉华中科技大学，09年赴法留学高等电力（今中央理工）双硕士。毕业后进入法国电力公司，先后担任核电管理系统更新项目负责人，核安全工程师，现任核电国际部项目经理，负责国际项目、交流和技术支持。

兴趣：健身，拉丁舞，滑雪，旅游，哲学。

本期荐稿：邓瑛（德国）

本期总编：静好（英国）

注：本期配图来自网络。